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读后续写首先在于情节的构建，一个好的情节才是故事的核心。

好的续写故事并不在于故事情节的跌宕起伏，而在于情能否动人。动人之处，往往可能就是一个点贯穿故事的始终，因为故事本来就很简单，所以必须让全篇的描写集中这个点来描写。那么这个点到底是什么？如何去挖掘？我总结了八种思维方法。今天我选讲第一讲：关于人物的性格。

本文收录在我的《读后续写王中王：极简思维》一书，版权所有。完全原创十分不易，请尊重作者的劳动。

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很多续写原文可能会交代了人物的性格特点，这就要我们在续写的时候围绕人物的性格特点来写。而人物性格可能有两种：积极；消极。如果是前者，那么所有情节设置都要体现积极面；如果是后者，那么既要有情节体现消极的，还必须有情节体现其性格的转变。

例1：续写 2017浙江真题 好忘的妈妈（原文题目略）

点的分析：原文一开始就说：I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and forgetful.

这意味着：下面的文章必须突出妈妈的性格特点：loving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and forgetful，尤其是后者。但很多同学光写好忘，却忘记了loving也不对的。

第一段：The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.

围绕好忘和开心设置：妈妈忘记了帐篷，然后做鬼脸去拿，我们被逗乐了。

第二段：We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.

写妈妈一路上不停的忘记，但总会给我们带来快乐。

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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.

Suddenly, warning bells began to sound in my head. （我的不祥预感）With butterflies in my stomach, I opened the trunk, only to findit was nowhere to be seen. （果然帐篷不见了）However, father and brother just shrugged because it was left in the charge of mother.（大家对妈妈的好忘习惯了）Mother made a face to us and then drove back immediately, which made us burst out laughing.（妈妈逗乐了我们并去取）Afterthe tent was fetched, we examined all the items carefully before we left for the destination. （衔接句，跳跃式略去了妈妈怎么取回来）

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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.

Every time we reached a new place, Mother almost jumped with joy like Columbus who discovered the New World. （衔接句，妈妈每到一个地方的开心）Needless to say, the rest of the journey still witnessedher leaving her album, key and so on. But she always amused us by singing and joking to make up for her mistakes. （妈妈一路上忘记种种，并一直逗我们开心）Luckily, we arrived home safe and sound. Tired as we were, the fun mom’s forgetfulness brought left a deep impression on us and would stay in our memory forever.（点名主旨，妈妈的性格让我们的旅途记忆更加难忘）（157）

例2：2020年7月山东卷 卖爆米花帮穷孩子（原文题目略）

略分析：本文一开始先开始就说了人物的性格：

困难时期的人们：People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.

Mrs. Meredith 的一家：Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.

必须注意：整个续写不能只围绕一方，二者都要兼顾，重点当然式Mrs. Meredith和她的一家。

如果明白这点，下面续写就容易了：

第一段：When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.

围绕乐于助人的性格，设置：买爆米花机器；教Bernard做爆米花。

第二段：With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.

继续突出人物性格，设置Mrs. Meredith陪Bernard去卖爆米花，人们慷慨解囊。

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When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea, she thought it was a good one, too.

Then she ordered a second-hand popcorn machine online without any hesitation. （买机器）Upon its arrival, they couldn’t wait to study how to operate the machine. Thank God! Tried out for hours,it worked out far better than expected. （试验成功，可以顺利生产爆米花）They immediately visited Bernard’s family and shared with them their popcorn plan with anticipation. （告知Bernard）With tears of gratitude,Bernard bowed to Mrs. Meredith and then got down toproducing popcorns. （Bernard的感激）

With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.

But to ensure Bernard’s success, Mrs. Meredith kept him companyand called on passers-by totaste the popcorn. （Mrs. Meredith陪他一起去卖）Though on tight budget, people were more moved than surprised to see such a little poor boy’s efforts to feed his family, buying a bag or two with delight eventually. （善良的人们来慷慨解囊）Soon, his pockets were full of money. “I make it. I make it.” Bernard threw himself intoMrs. Meredith’s arms. （卖掉爆米花的兴奋）How grateful he felt forMrs. Meredith’s family that taught him to fish! It is love thatmakes the world go round.（ 点题） (157 words)

练习：

1. It was the old lady’s birthday. She got up early to be ready for the postman. Today she was sure there would be something. Myra wouldn’t forget her mother’s birthday, even if she seldom wrote at other times. Of course Myra was busy. Her husband had been made Mayor, and Myra herself had got a medal for her work for the aged.

The old lady was proud of Myra, but Enid was the daughter she loved. Enid had never married, but had seemed pleased to live with her mother, and worked in a primary school around the corner. One evening, however, Enid said, “I’ve arranged for Mrs. Morrison to look after you for a few days, Mother. Tomorrow I have to go into hospital—just a ‘minor’ operation, I’ll soon be home.” In the morning she went, but never came back—she died on the operating table. Myra came to the funeral (葬礼), and in her efficient way arranged for Mrs. Morrison to come in and light the fire and give the old lady her breakfast. That was two years ago, and since then Myra had been to see her mother three times, but her husband never.

The old lady was eighty today. She had put on her best dress. Perhaps—perhaps Myra might come. After all, eighty was a special birthday. Even if Myra did not come, she would send a present, for example something like a parcel. The old lady was sure of that. Two spots of color brightened her cheeks. She was excited—like a child. She would enjoy her day.

Yesterday Mrs. Morrison had given the flat an extra clean, and today she had brought a card and a bunch of marigolds when she came to do the breakfast. The neighbor downstairs had made a cake for her. The little boy upstairs, Johnnie, had been up with a packet of mints (薄荷糖), saying he wouldn’t go out to play until the post had come. “I guess you’ll get lots and lots of lovely presents,” he added, “I did last week when I was six.”

注意：

1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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She stood by the window, watching.

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Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.

略分析：

本文说明了Myra的性格：Myra herself had got a medal for her work for the aged.

作为小说其结尾会有多种，而且完全可以是Myra没有来给妈妈过生日，小说凸显妈妈的失望和无奈。也可以是女儿只写信说明情况。

但作为续写，我们要突出正能量，可能更适合写女儿来到妈妈家，感动了妈妈，这也照应了女儿的品格说明。

Paragraph 1:

She stood by the window, watching.

1.景色描写和期待的场景

Golden sunlight danced in her white hair and Johnnie’s laughter floated in the air. She stared at the end of the road, hoping the postman would come earlier. It seemed as if she had been standing there for a century.

2.突然的转折，邮递员来了

Suddenly, a spark of delight glittered in her eyes when she caught sight of the postman. Then came the knock.

3.衔接场景：失望，根据下文的reluctant

But soon her delight faded away when the postman only gave her an envelope.

“No parcel? Or anything else?” “No, madam. Have a nice day! Bye.” Disappointment gradually covered her face.

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Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.

1.衔接：信的内容：女儿给她的惊喜

A thin paper fell down and there was only a single line, “Mom, go downstairs. I have a birthday gift for you.”

2.妈妈的开心

With a mixture of confusion and expectation, she went downstairs. Her eyes lit up with pleasure the moment she saw in her garden stood her lovely daughter, Myra, smiling at her. Tears rolled down when Myra ran towards her and hugged her tightly.

3.点题：

“Mum, do you love your present?” “Of course, I love you.” she replied with a satisfied and sweet smile.

完整的原文：

Paragraph 1:

She stood by the window, watching. Golden sunlight danced in her white hair and Johnnie’s laughter floated in the air. She stared at the end of the road, hoping the postman would come earlier. It seemed as if she had been standing there for a century. Suddenly, a spark of delight glittered in her eyes when she caught sight of the postman. Then came the knock. But soon her delight faded away when the postman only gave her an envelope. “No parcel? Or anything else?” “No, madam. Have a nice day! Bye.” Disappointment gradually covered her face.

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Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. A thin paper fell down and there was only a single line, “Mom, go downstairs. I have a birthday gift for you.” With a mixture of confusion and expectation, she went downstairs. Her eyes lit up with pleasure the moment she saw in her garden stood her lovely daughter, Myra, smiling at her. Tears rolled down when Myra ran towards her and hugged her tightly. “Mum, do you love your present?” “Of course, I love you.” she replied with a satisfied and sweet smile.

2.

Yoghurt

It was a rough week. The price of oil skyrocketed as the temperature dropped sharply in Maine. We were looking at a high of eight degrees that week, and I had missed three days of work so my paycheck was going to be lower than normal. I was stressed, to say the least. I shopped strategically, looking for every possible way to cut pennies so I could buy groceries and keep the house warm.

My eight-year-old son didn't understand when I told him we were struggling that week. He wanted a special kind of yoghurt, but I didn't have the extra three dollars to buy it for him. It was the kind of yoghurt with a cartoon kid riding a skateboard on the front of the box, and a mere two spoonfuls in each cup. It was the kind of product that wastes a parent's money and makes me hate advertising.

I felt guilty as a parent when those big eyes looked at me with confusion, as if to say, “It's just yoghurt. What's the big deal?” So I found a way. I put something back as single mothers often do. He got his yoghurt.

On the way driving back from the grocery store, I noticed a homeless man holding a sign by the side of the road. My heart hurt, and I tried not to look at him. I watched people stay away from him on the street and walk by without even meeting his eyes. My son didn't seem to care much, either. I looked at the man closely then-bare hands grasping a piece of cardboard, snot（鼻涕）frozen to his face, a worn-out jacket. And there I was struggling because I had to buy oil and groceries.

But I decided to help. I pulled over to the man and handed him a five-dollar bill.

Paragraph 1：Seeing this, my son became confused and surprised.

Paragraph 2: On that day, my son performed an act that most adults wouldn't have done.

略分析：

这篇文章也是基于经济环境不好来写人物，主要人物是我的八岁的儿子。

My eight-year-old son didn't understand when I told him we were struggling that week.

这句说明了儿子不懂事，或者说自私吧，结合续写提示句第二句，应该推测得出续写要写出儿子从自私到大方和爱心的华丽转变。

关键在于，不要急于一下子就写转变，要在第一段依旧突出儿子的不懂事，然后经过我的一番话教导后实现了改变。

下水文：(请注意画线句对人物性格的刻画)

Paragraph 1：Seeing this, my son became confused and surprised. My son frowned, “Why did you do that？You know five dollars can buy me another yoghurt.”Staring at him gently, I stroked his head and told him that the man was hungry and the money at least could help him get through this cold night. At this, he was lost in thought.After a moment of silence, a slight smile played across his face. He said in a firm voice,“Wait a moment. I will do something for him.”

Paragraph 2: On that day, my son performed an act that most adults wouldn't have done. The next minutes witnessedhim getting off the car and running over to him. “This is for you.” He handed him his favorite yoghurt, looking at him sincerely. God! I couldn’t believe my eyes, my jaw almost dropping. The man hesitated for a while before he took it. I suddenly saw the tears of gratitude shining in his eyes.My rough and gloomy days brightened because my boy did learn to pass on kindness. Cold as it was, I felt a stream of warmth running through my body.（177）

范文：（超过词数了，但是结尾比较点赞，充分照应线索）

Seeing this, my son became confused and surprised. “Why are you so generous to a stranger while mean to me?” he questioned, upset. Looking back at those big eyes, I smiled, “Don’t you think it worthwhile to spend what a cup of yoghurt costs helping a homeless man survive this freezing weekend?” Hearing it, my son looked down at the yoghurt in his hand, nodded slowly and said nothing. But just before I got the car started, he patted my shoulder, “Mum, wait a minute!”

On that day, my son performed an act that most adults wouldn’t have done. With a determined look, my little gentleman opened the car door, stepped straight to the poor man and handed him his favorite yoghurt. Hands trembling, the man took the gift, a warm smile spreading. When my little gentleman came back proudly, I spotted a middle-aged man stopped to give the beggar some coins and so did a woman and her daughter. In the cold wind kindness spread. Having settled on the back seat, my son suddenly whispered, “Could you please draw a picture of a cartoon boy riding a skateboard with me tonight?” With a mixture of pride and guilt, I agreed. What a priceless yoghurt I bought! （195）

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